A New Vision

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‘Hello, New Age Opticians…’

‘Oh hi, I’m having trouble with the contact lens you supplied me this morning.’

‘I thought we’d sorted this out?’

‘It’s still not right.’

‘So what seems to be the problem now?’

‘It’s making my eye water. A lot.’

‘I see…’

‘No actually, it’s more of an ocean. In fact there’s a dolphin in my field of vision right now.’

‘Oh how lovely… I mean: that is serious. Is it in the left eye or the right?’

‘Neither.’

‘Oh, the third one.’

‘Yes, my mind’s eye.’

‘Then there’s nothing to worry about, Sir, you’re imagining it.’

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Friday Fictioneers (FF) is a challenge open to writers all over the world: write a 100 word story using the week’s unique photo as inspiration. This week’s picture is supplied by Jean L. Hays.

More hows, whens and whats of FF can be found here at Rochelle’s site. (Thank you, Rochelle, for hosting.)

Read more FF stories here.

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  1. #1 by Sandra on December 18, 2013 - 13:47

    Very convincing after sales service there! Nice one.

  2. #3 by yarnspinnerr on December 18, 2013 - 14:05

    This is wonderfully imaginative.

    • #4 by mike olley on December 18, 2013 - 16:28

      Thank you kindly, Yarnspinnerr.

  3. #5 by kz on December 18, 2013 - 16:04

    haha :) loved the conversation. this was really fun to read out loud.

    • #6 by mike olley on December 18, 2013 - 16:30

      Thank you, kz, that is one of the greatest compliments anyone could have given me.

  4. #7 by elmowrites on December 18, 2013 - 16:05

    Aww, I like the service rep – I think I’d see it as a bit of an advantage too!

    • #8 by mike olley on December 18, 2013 - 17:16

      Everyone is polite and positive in New Age Opticals – you can’t help but like them.

  5. #9 by Lindaura Glamoura on December 18, 2013 - 17:39

    This really made me chuckle. I just loved the matter of fact way everyone behaved in the story. very charming.

    • #10 by mike olley on December 18, 2013 - 18:11

      Thank you, Linda. Isn’t this story a typical situation in everyone else’s life? : )

  6. #11 by helenmidgley on December 18, 2013 - 17:42

    That was so clever, great job :)

  7. #13 by talesfromthemotherland on December 18, 2013 - 20:58

    Clever and fun, a perfect combination! Really like how easy your dialogue came along.

  8. #16 by rochellewisoff on December 18, 2013 - 22:22

    Dear Mike,

    A contact lens for the mind’s eye? Fun dialogue. I enjoyed this.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    • #17 by mike olley on December 19, 2013 - 10:09

      Thanks, Rochelle. Contacts are easier than glasses.

  9. #18 by Karen Whitelaw on December 19, 2013 - 01:33

    Hi Mike. You had me laughing out loud. I love the way you lead me along to a completely unexpected ending. Or am I imagining it…

    • #19 by mike olley on December 19, 2013 - 10:11

      It’s all in the ‘focused’ mind, Karen : ) (Thanks)

  10. #20 by mutedbutpresent on December 19, 2013 - 02:58

    Mike, you worked out a great one. I’m starting to notice a trend in these flash fictions that I never even thought of: fiction as dialogue. It truly has a beginning, middle, and end, but is completely in the voices of two characters. I’ve always been hesitant to start out a story with dialogue — much less the entire thing!
    Very inventive.

    • #21 by mike olley on December 19, 2013 - 10:15

      Thanks MBP, it comes from years of evesdropping conversations on buses and trains. And now with mobile / cell phones the trick is to write a one-sider…

  11. #22 by draliman on December 19, 2013 - 09:41

    That was clever and amusing. Great dialogue :-)

  12. #24 by lizy on December 19, 2013 - 09:43

    that made me smile – your story was the first one I read this morning.

    • #25 by mike olley on December 19, 2013 - 10:17

      Thanks, Lizy. That’s the way to do it, start the day with a smile, your day can only get better now.

  13. #26 by patrickprinsloo on December 19, 2013 - 14:03

    Wonderful. Where did it come from?!

    • #27 by mike olley on December 19, 2013 - 18:42

      The fifth corner of my mind,
      the one next to the windmill : )

  14. #28 by rgayer55 on December 20, 2013 - 04:54

    For a minute there I thought you were a cyclops :)

    • #29 by mike olley on December 20, 2013 - 11:57

      That’s daft, Russell. Cyclops doesn’t exist : )

  15. #30 by annisik51 on December 22, 2013 - 18:28

    Without meaning to (I guess) you’ve drawn attention to the very fine line between ‘imaginating’ and ‘hallucinating’, if there is one … :)

    • #31 by mike olley on December 23, 2013 - 12:09

      Thanks, Anna. The doors of perception have been left ajar.

  16. #32 by annisik51 on December 23, 2013 - 12:45

    Oh, no, I’ve used ‘too’ instead of ‘to’. I’ve disgraced myself as a proofreader! I’m going to blame it on sloe gin – I must have had two much last night. :)

    • #33 by mike olley on December 23, 2013 - 12:53

      Too, two, or three – it’s allowed, this time of the year : )

  17. #35 by lingeringvisions by Dawn on December 24, 2013 - 03:20

    Perfect perspective.

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